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I am a student at Kossuth Lajos High School in Budapest. This is my last year in the school, then I would like to go to university, to study to become a History and Hungarian Literature teacher. This would be my dream job. Nowadays, our country is short of teachers, so I think to find a position in this profession won’t be too hard to find. To make my dream comes true, I have to study 5 years to obtain a teacher's degree. At the beginning for a few years, I want to teach little children in elementary school and after this, in a high school. A teacher’s duties are teaching pupils, setting up tests, correcting them, recording absences, noting the marks in the electronic book, preparing for the next lesson, make-up the curriculum, organising trips and events and supporting students with problems A good teacher is kind, polite, hard-working, understanding, appropriately strict and patient The teacher-student relationship and communication need to be very good. Once a month, the teachers have to attend staff meetings discussing students’ marks, behavour and organisation skills, school trips..and so on. It’s a good chance to talk with other teachers, with your colleagues To cooperate with them is very important.

To conclude, being a teacher is the the best job ever, because you teach the people of the future.

My daily routine on weekdays is different from the routine on weekends. My timetable for example on Wednesdays and Fridays is the following: I get up at 6.30 am. Of course, in summer I’m up early) brush my teeth, wash my face , comb my hair, make my breakfast and my lunch for school. After this, I get dressed and I put on my face a little make-up. At 7 o’clock I go to the bus stop and at half past 7 I arrive at the school. Usually, I go home at 1 pm or at 2.30 pm it depends on how many lessons I have on the day, 5 or 7. As soon as I get home, I eat my lunch, check my e-mails, my messages and I start studying again. During the evening, I feed my rabbits and chat with my parents about what happened at school. At 7 pm I usually listen to some music or watch TV with my parents. At 8 o’clock, I take a shower and I prepare myself to go to bed. I like reading books in bed, so it’s a daily programme. At 9 or 9.30 I fall asleep. Thus, I sleep for approximately 9 hours. For me, it’s enough. During the weekends I study more, and I entertain more. If we have beautiful weather, I go for a walk in the nearest mountains or in the zoo with my family. During the school break, I visit my friends and spend a pleasant day with them.

For me, it’s important to study over the weekend because I have more time and enough energy. . During these 2 days, I study for the following 5 days’ lessons: I do my homework and write the graduation’s items. (???)

It’s really interesting that I love to do something without a break, I hate to be bored for just one minute. Also, it’s very annoying to know I have a lot of choirs still to completed, I like to know everything is organised and is in the right way.

#6!

Te valami nagyon keseru emberke lehetsz, sajnalom, hogy savanyu szolobol all az eleted.

"hogy rosszul rögzüljön"

Hát ezért próbáltam felhívni a figyelmedet, hogy az entertaint vélhetőleg rosszul használod, de látom, hiába.