Valaki kijavítaná ezt a fogalmazást? (ANGOL)

Dear Sir or Madam,

vessző

"If he had to walk school, he will have had to wake up at 5 o’clock every day."

Itt ugralsz az idoben, az elejen meg az egesz mult idoben van, a mondat masik fele viszont jovo. A masodik mondatreszbe nem kell a "had", es a school ele kell a "to".

Itt marha hülyén hangzik az affect:

*He cannot travel with bus because the local bus does not affect our street.

He cannot travel with bus because the local bus does not pass our street.

Nem with car hanem by car:

*If we want to reach the school, we have to travel 20 minutes with car.

If we want to reach the school, we have to travel 20 minutes by car.

Ez a feltételes mondat rossz. Jó lenne átnéznéd jobban a témakört:

*If he had to walk school, he will have had to wake up at 5 o’clock every day.

If he had to walk school, he should wake up at 5 o’clock every day.

Ebben több hiba is van (6):

*I will be happy, if he can start learn in the nearest school, because he can reach this school with bicycle or go with their friends.

I would be happy if he can start studying in the nearest school because he can reach this school by bicycle or walk with his friends.

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to you to express my concerns and disappointment with your decision regarding the intake area and acceptance of my seven year old son's schooling, named Jon Carter, starting in September.

I have applied for a placement at ...Primary School, dated ...2016, which is located in the next street from our home, which is also in the local catchment area.

I have received a notification from your department on July .., 2016 stating that Jon has been enrolled and accepted into .... Primary School, which is incidentally located in another area of town.

Travelling to the school named by you would take each day, each way, 20 minutes by car.

I regularly work away from home, at present, in Germany, therefore, I would not be available to provide transport or supervise his daily transportation to and from school.

My main concerns here are my primary school aged child's safety and well-being.

If he was to walk to the school indicated by you, he would need to rise at 5 am on each morning of each school day to arrive on time for his first lesson.

Certainly, you would agree, this is not an option to consider.

Furthermore, he can not travel by bus, as local bus services do not pass in our street, nor do we have a designated bus stop.

On the other hand, if Jon was to attend the school that I applied to, he would be able to walk to school and back home in the company of his friends and at least one other parent.

I hereby request for my son to be enrolled and to attend the nearest primary school located to his residential address.

I expect your immediate attention and rectification of the above outlined matter.

I am available to discuss my son's schooling arrangements, my concerns and issues regarding the unsuitability of the proposed school's location in more details at a pre-arranged meeting at a mutually suitable time and location.

Yours faithfully,

XY