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Being a model should be great, since, if you are one of the gifted and talented, you can make a huge pile of money. You also meet with packs of dignitaries. And then you are a really celebrated person, and people spot you when you are nonchalantly rambling the streets. That's all very alluring and actually fantastic but, also, there are cons as well. Being a model also means endless journeys, and at that, you scarcely have the opportunity to converge with family and friends. You are not allowed to eat whatever you wish to, as you must follow your obligatory and strict slim diet.

Regardless, in case you genuinely set your goal to become a model, you CAN ultimately meet your ends. In your place I would go up to talk to my parents straight at first and explicate the very reasons I treasured this thought so much. And if you are lucky and can get their backings, you can register at a model agency.

I wish your dreams came true!

/Isaura/