Kijavítanátok ebben a angollevélben az esetleges hibákat?

recognises

travels

follows

first

explain to them

Being a model may be a good thing, because if you are skillful, you can earn a lot of money and meet lots of people. You can be famous, so that everybody can recognise you walking on the street. This all very nice and appealing but there are a number of reasons on the opposite side. If somebody is a model, she is always travelling, so that she just rarely see her family and friends. She cannot eat what she wants to because she needs to follow a strict diet.

Anyway, if you really want to be a model, you can achieve your goal. If I were you, I would talk to my parents first and explain to them why I cherished the idea so badly. And if they supported me, I would go to a model agency.

I hope that your dreams will come true.

Nem mind hiba de azért átírtam, pl. many helyett más kifejezések is vannak a sokra.

Utolsó előtti! Olyat, hogy :she always traveling nem mondunk! A she always travels teljesen helyes. Egyébként jó a javítás:)

Being a model may be a good thing, because if you are skillful, you can earn a lot of money, and meet lots of people. if you are famous, everybody will recognise you while you are walking in the streets. It’s all very nice and seductive but there are also several reasons on the other hand. If somebody is a model, she always travels, so she rarely meets her family and friends. She must not eat what she wants to because she has to follow a strict diet.

Anyway, If you really want to be a model, you can achieve your goal. If I were you, at first I would talk to my parents and explain them why I want it so badly. If they supported me, I would go to a model agency.

I hope that your dreams will come true.

Na kijavítottam és angolosabbá tettem néhány részt, de nagyrészben jó volt :) Ügyes vagy kérdező! :)

Egy angoltanár :)

Kedves utolsó,

A kérés az volt, hogy javítsuk a hibákat, én ezt úgy értelmezem, hogy a súlyos hibákat. Mivel én is tanár vagyok, úgy gondolom, hogy amíg valaki viszonylag durvább hibát is vét, addig nem kell a stilisztikával is gyötörni. Az első válaszoló kijavította a legdurvábbakat. Én, másodikként, írtam még kettőt. Megkérdezhetem, hogy az általam már kijavított két hibát miért csempészted vissza?

at first-> eleinte

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explain után pedig nem állhat indirekt tárgy to nélkül

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Üdvözlettel,

Egy másik tanár

if you are skilled*

It's very nice and appealing*

recognises*

travels*

explain it to them*

If I were you, I would talk to my parents first*

..she has to followe a strict diet*