Jól van írva ez pár angol mondat?

Tele van hibával. Az első ami szembetűnik, hogy a did segédige csak kérdésnél és tagadásnál van, illetve ez már alapból kifejezi a múlt időt, tehát a did után present perfect-es alakban van az ige. Pl: I didn't find. vagy Did I find?. Kijelentő mondantál pedig: I found.

A legelejét így kezdeném:

The story of how I won my first derby in the UK.

First of all I picked off our favourit horses on the coupon and I bought the tickets and then we were ready to start. When we were sitting on the seats at the beginning of the derby suddenly a strong wind blew the tickets out of my hands towards the other players. I almost went crazy and couldn't believe it and I prayed to not that horse wins the race which I voted for. And unfortunately that horse won the race. And suddenly I noticed that tickets were at a man's legs and we shouted and waved to him to find our tickets and hopefully he found them and took back. After this we won 2 following races ... what a lucky day!

Hát lehet, hogy van benne 1-2 hiba, de már késő van. LOL

Javítanám:

Ennél a résznél:

And suddenly I noticed that 'the' tickets

Na végezetül így néz ki a mondat:

And I suddenly noticed that the tickets are at a man's legs and we shouted and waved to him to find our tickets and hopefully he found them and took back.