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I live in Gödöllő. It is a middle-sized city in Pest county, where more than 30,000 people live. I think this city is beautiful. The reason why I like living here that is everything can be found there, such as supermarkets, several smaller shops, parks, a university, a fire department, etc. My favourite park in Gödöllő is Erzsébet park because it has many trees and a wonderful statue. A lot of tourists come here to visit the Grassalkovich palace. At the Szent István University also there are some foreign students studying. The local weather here is usually sunny but sometimes rainy. Every year Gödöllő holds a festival called Belvárosi napok. Many singers perform here and at the end of the festival people celebrate with fireworks. So that’s the city where I live.