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The Tiny Bird and The Colors

There was a bird,

who was pure white.

Howewer, he didn't like his color.

He thought it was too trite.

So he went through the colorful sky

in the cheerful orange of smile

he flew through the pink of cold

and he dipped in the tears of blue

As he travelled around the colorful world,

he finally became the most colorful bird.

But after all, he was not satisfied.

He felt like he is still plain and white.

So he started to search for colors again

That's how he found the anger of red.

He flew through the beautiful purple of haze

but he didnn't know he was in his very last phase.

Because he adsorbed so many paint

his colors slowly started to fade

they were fading and mixing...

and you know what happened next?

He became a dark and obscure bird of black.

He couldn't handle this bleak color

so after all he started to fall.

He falled into the eternal depths,

but he didn't know it...

he was already in the hands of Death.

Köszönöm, ha elolvastad!