Valaki átnézné az angol fogalmazásom?

Nagyon rövid és bugyuta lett a lényege az hogy homophone szavakat használjunk. Íme:

One day afternoon in a park were a lot of people. The mayor fent for a walk with his mare. One man wore a green jacket with text war. Children ate a pair of pear. An old woman came from a shop. She bought flour and beautiful flower. The heroine looked for heroin. In the park were one lake. A boy sat on a pier and he peerd a water and ducks. A girl was very sad and mourning, because her dog died in morning.

Előre is köszönöm :)