Egy rövid fogalmazás kéne! Segítene valaki?

Last sunday we went to the zoo with my family.It was a beatiful day hot day in july, the sun was shining.We decided to first watch the bugs in the zoo.It was a little bit scary because im afriad of spiders and this house was full of spiders.Suddenly somebody screamed.We ran out of the bug house and we saw that a little boy was inside the cage(???) with the rhinos and his hand was covered in blood my dad had jumped into the cage and brought him out from there-He saved his life!!!The ambulance has arrived in 10 minites and they took away the little boy to the first hospital.Luckly it wasn't serious and the boys now alriht and my father is a hero!!

Most hirtelen csak ennyit tudtam de remélem azért segítettem

Kiváló fogalmazás az előző, bár a címhez (tömör újságcikkcím)nem passzol ez a személyes élménybeszámoló. De lehet, hogy a tanárt ez nem zavarja, és legalább nem kell megírni. Kijavítom a nyelvtani hibákat:

Sunday, July nagy betű, im afriad = I'm afraid ...covered in blood. My dad jumped into the cage ...

The ambulance arrived in 10 minutes

to hospital.

the boys now alriht = the boy's now alright