Saját dalszöveg! Elfogadható?

A véleményetekre vagyok kiváncsi. Ez az első dalszövegem ráadásul elég fiatal is vagyok úgy, hogy ne várjatok sokat tőlem😅. Leginkább építő jellegű kritikára lennék kíváncsi. Nem vagyok ANNYIRA jó az angolban szóval könnyen meglehet, hogy valahol kicsikét baromságot írtam😂

Sorry, I got to close to you

But i couldn't tell the true

Im not the girl who you know

Sorry i lied to you too long

See that became of me

Corpses around me

I'm smiling at you

But i cry inside for you

Baby, please save your life

I see you in the night

Please dont cry for me

You're the light of the night

Honey, run run as you can

Blood sticks to my hand

Honey run run as you can

We lost what we had

The darkness is coming

My hand is numbing

I feel tbe darkness pour

Im going to lose control

I am the evil one here.

Why did you trus me?

Why you didn't recognize me?

Honey, why don't you stop me?

I see the scare in your eyes

And i try not to cry

Tears roll of my face

The waves sweep away.

When i fall to the ground

I hear your distant sound.

I blow my last breath

Don't be sad if i die here

Why, Why is this happening to me?

The demons of darkness are here

I tried to escape from of them

But is all the more complicated

Honey, run run as you can

Blood sticks to my hand

Honey run run as you can

We lost what we had

The darkness is coming

My hand is numbing

I feel the darkness pour

Im going to lose control

See that became of me

Cropses around me

I'm smiling at you

But i cry inside for you.