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Xbox One is a home video game console, developed by Microsoft. Announced in May 2013. It can run digital and disc games as well. It has got a "Marketplace" where i can download several applications for free, and i can buy games and other applications (which is not free) with credit card. Lot of useful application is avalible on the Marketplace for example Twich, where other gamers are streaming their gameplays. It has got a Blue Ray player, and it can play 4K movies. The controller is the remote control. I can speak and chat with my friends on the Xbox (just like in Skype), and we can play at the same time. Every game has got Achievments, which are challanges, and if i complete one, than i get points to my profile, and my friends can see which Achievment i completed. There are exclusive games like Forza Motorsports, or Halo, which is not avalible on other consoles. The kinect is a device for the xbox, and if i have it, than no longer need the controller. It has got sensors, and it's tracking my movement, and basically my movment is controlling the game. There are very good sport games for the kinect for example: tennis, football, golf, bowling and so on. So i can doing sports and play video games at the same time. I can connect my laptop to the xbox with HDMI cable, and then i can see my pc monitor screen on the big screen TV. It's very practical if i want to watch movies on the TV, becouse i don't have to copy the movies on my pendrive. So i can use the TV as a monitor. I think the console is better choice, than a Desktop PC, becouse a Desktop PC needs upgrade very often, (if i want to play the newer games) and it can be expensive. I think the only Disadventige is that the new games are very expensive on the Xbox, usually around 20 000 Forint, but the price usually going down after 30-60 days later.