Milyen a fogalmazásom, angol középfokú nyelvvizsgára készülök a levélírást gyakoroltam? Mennyi pontot kapnék rá?

Vannak benne hibák:pl."would be happy if this article is able to appear" / "dog which name is Gyilkos" / "should be calmed".

Amúgy szókincset kéne bővíteni! Ez ilyen éppen 60%.

"These things can be good examples for the youth"(?)

A fiatalok(?) az for younger people -

"I have a dog which name is G"

(I have a dog with the name G")

For many people, a pet is their best friend and they enjoy their companionship.

For many people a pet is their best friend and they enjoy their company a lot.

Hy I am John, and i am writning for my school magazine about keeping a pet.

Hi, I'm John, and I am writing for my school magazine about keeping a pet.

I am really interested in keeping house pets and i think it can be a good hobby.

I'm really interested in having pets and I think it can be a good hobby.

The relationship between pets and man is more important than many things in

our life..

The relationship between pets and man is more important than many other things in

our lives.

We have to feed them, to care for them and to keep a responsibility.

We have to feed them, care for them and be responsible.

These things can be a good example for the youth.

These things can set a good example for the young.

I have a dog which name is Gyilkos.

I have a dog called Gyilkos.

It’s 2 years old with unique appearance,

He/She’s two years old with a unique appearance.

In addition Gyilkos is very smart, and easy to train for example to bring back the

ball or to understand the Sit down command.

In addition, Gyilkos is very smart, and easy to train. For example, he can fetch a

ball and understands the "Sit" command.

To keep a dog is don’t mean that we have a dog and it can to do what it want.

To keep a dog doesn’t mean he can to do whatever he wants.

This is more difficult.

It is more more than that.

The dogs feel your energy, if you are stressed and angry your dog feels it.

A dog feels your energy, whether you are stressed and angry.

So you should always be determined and calmed when you are doing something with your dog.

So you should always be determined and calm when you do something with your dog.

And it is important to channel your dog plus energy, you should run or play with it.

It is important to channel your dog plus energy, you should run or play with him.

All in all to care for pets is not easy.

All in all, caring for pets is not easy.

It’s important to take them to the vet, or always keep them cleanly.

It’s important to take them to the vet and always keep them clean.

And request some information from your vet that how to feed them.

You should also ask for information from your vet what food to give them.

I hope this informations are useful for you, and would be happy if this article is able to

Appear in our school magazine.

I hope this information will be useful, and I would be happy if it could appear in our school magazine.