Valaki segítene? Angol fogalmazás-A család és én

Sziasztok! Lenne valaki olyan kedves, hogy átnézné ezt a fogalmazást? Nem házi feladat, csupán nyelvvizsgára gyakorlok. A téma: Me and my family. First of all, I havent"t got a huge family. I live with my dad and with my muther. I have a brother too, who lives in Miskolc with his family. He has a wife and a little girl too. My brother is 31 years old, so he went to the university, when I was 5. So I haden't seen his so much. Usually, they visit us. they work a lot, so this visitings are holding at Christmas, Easter and summer holiday. My grandparents are not alive. When my grandpa was with us, unfortunatelly we didn't visit him so often, because he lived far from us. And yes, I know that, what I'm going to say, it's not an original family. But I look to my 2 best friends like my relatives. They are always help me, and encouraging me. We work as a family. We visit each other once a week. Sometimes at my home, or their home, or in Budapest. And of course, the chatting is daily with them. In my opinion, it's possible to coexistence with several generations. Of course, we have problem ’cause the generation gap, but ist’s surmountable. But we must to mention, that in today’s wolrd it’s unimagianable to have 3 or 4 generations liveing under the same roof. It has advantages and disadvantages too. For example, it would be a drawback that we lose our privacy, futhermore in a small house. Everyboday needs a little loneliness. And general opinion, that the eldelry people are always full of advice: they don’t want to admit that the world has changed.Friction is common when three generations live together. On the other hand, the grandparents can helo to their chidlren and shareing the work is much easier too. Apróbb elírások lehetnek benne. Köszönöm szépen!