Írtam angolul egy verset (az elsőt). Hogy tetszik? Érthető? Átjön a lényeg? Hogy lehet még jobb?

jaj jesszus ne hari de ezt egy angolul értőnek fájt olvasni. hadd javítsam ki, hátha publikálni akarnád ne oltsanak halálra. szívesen.

Say: we're best friends

Telling eachother many secrets.

But when I needed you,

You were with someone new.

We talked about other people,

And maybe, we were evil.

But every moment, like this,

Was added to our memories.

We were inseparable,

We tought it's impossible

To part. But it wasn't.

We just simply forgot.

Two turned into three soon.

And your life was happy.

I don't know, what changed,

But suddenly, you disappeared.

You didn't look back.

You left me alone, 'Best friend'...

eskü néha nem értettem volna meg mit akarsz ha nem írod oda magyarul is. Ha angolul akarsz írni tanultasd még kicsit a nyelvet. vers szerkezetileg is hagy kívánnivalót maga után, bár abban nem vagyok szakértő. de próbáltam azt is igazgatni.

Nem valami jó,bocsesz.

Nyelvtanilag is vannak benne hibák.Magyarul is inkább egy elbeszélés,mint vers.

We said we were best friends.

We told each other our secrets.

But if I needed you,

You were with someone new.

We talked about other people,

Maybe we were mean,

But every moment like this

Is written in our memories

We were inseparable

We thought it was impossible to – (ezt a “to”-t én tettem bele, mert kellett)

Separate. But no.

Or we simply forgot.

We went from 2 to 3 in no time,

And you were happy.

I don't know what's changed,

But suddenly you were gone.

You never looked back

You left me alone, my best friend

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We thought it was impossible to – (a sor végi a “to”-t én tettem bele, mert kellett oda)